I suppose I should give this woman some sort of social network.
If only so she can blow it off.
*Math-Impaired Barbie voice* Writing is hard.
However, I have new words. Of course, there's no real drama here. Quiet desperation, yes. Drama, not so much. *reminds self: Show, don't tell* Or, you know, tell, then fix it so you're showing, like you had to do with that first scene.
ETA: You know it's bad when you're tempted to put [Insert music montage here]. Again, I say: GAH.
I also fixed a couple of problems in the A&tS story. I may have to just print that puppy out and go after it with a red pen. Eyeballs on paper the old-fashioned way...