I have crashed a plane (in fiction). And this scene sucks like a big sucking thing. It's terrible, y'all. Much badness lies here.
Part of the problem is that the scene I have plotted out in my head happens after the plane crash. I never plotted the crash itself. I'm not even sure how the damb thing crashed. I'm thinking a terrorist attack/kidnap attempt, but how do you crash a plane to (a) make sure your target survives--especially if he's a known risk-taker and probably doesn't use his seat belt, like, anywhere; and (b) make sure the people on the plane are accessible to you after it crashes?
Less than 250 words, and my plot doesn't work. Like, at all.
I've written over 1100 words of what I'm calling the not!iron man story. I made the plane crash work and decided it needs to stay there, because if we open with not!Pepper regaining consciousness in the basement, we don't really get a sense of these people, like, at all. If it was Iron Man, I could leave the crash out, but since it's not (really!), that scene needs to stay.
Also, I need to figure out a spec element, stat. This guy isn't a superhero, he's just a (very rich) guy. If he got rich making weapons, well, that puts him uncomfortably close to Tony Stark. But I think it needs to be some sort of R&D...maybe pharmaceuticals or something.
Maybe a superflu of some sort. Will have to think on this. And figure out who these people really are. Scraping off the serial numbers is one thing. Making them live and breathe and be themselves is quite another.