October 18th, 2008

KKBB manip Tony/Pepper

Snippet Saturday!

The lovely and effulgent difrancis (Diana Pharaoh Francis, her books are brilliant, you should totally check them out, fer serious) runs a little thing on her LJ she calls "Snippet Saturday," wherein she posts a snippet of something she's working on and invites the rest of us to do the same. Because I'm a shameless h0r, I frequently participate in this, and have done so this week.

Here's mine. Remember that remark the other day about "the most horrifying thing I'd ever written"? Yeah, that. And really, I don't know why this scene just gives me the cold shudders it does, but...yeah. Maybe it's the idea of using a human as a dialysis machine for a vampire and the fact that I have a thing about blood to begin with, so it hits my squicks just right.


And now I should really sit down and write my requisite 250 words for the day. I need something more between the current scene and the one before it, so I can rachet up the dramatic tension a smidge before not!Tony and not!Perry go riding to the rescue.
KKBB manip Tony/Pepper

*smacks Muse upside the head*

You know, putting this:

Because he wasn't dead. She refused, utterly, to believe that he was.

Right before the scene where not!Harry wakes up? Is the exact opposite of "ratcheting up the tension" here.

*growls and fixes*

She hated to admit it, but she honestly thought that Janni was right. If Marilyn and Alex brought anything back...it would be a body.

Yeah, that's better.