April 3rd, 2013

wolf eyes

My tweets

  • Tue, 14:00: Shipped off the sub packet. Postage is horrifying. Yes, a novella is heavy, but damn, $5.60? Priority was actually cheaper than 1st class!
  • Tue, 15:27: Two stories flipped, copyedits for a third gone over, and market for a fourth chosen. That will have to wait, because postage.
  • Wed, 10:49: Another personal rejection. Am I getting better, or do I just have their attention? #rejectomancy
Hit you for no reason

Writing dilemma.

Yeah, so, Glam!Ben was rejected. A personal rejection, I think the very first personal rejection I've ever gotten from these fine folks. She said she wanted more depth and complexity from the bad guys but loved the humor and the little twist where Ben's not actually the Alpha. (This is not, particularly, a spoiler for my flist. No one who knows Ben would mistake him for an Alpha anything.)

Now, I made my bad guy a shallow Bad Bond Villain totally on purpose. There's even a wink in there to "twirling his mustache." So I get where she's coming from on the whole "more depth." It's a fair criticism, and she's not wrong.

So, I guess the question is, how do I add "more depth" to a character when I'd really like to keep the story under 6000 words (it's knocking on 5900 at this point), and it's not from his POV? And... well... should I?

I've got him monologuing pretty good there. Honestly, I think I could add a couple of lines and give him the depth. If only I knew what those lines should be...

I'll poke the thing, I guess. Because, like I say, the editor was not wrong.