I thought the editing process was supposed to make you take out chunks and tighten up your wording. However, after going over the "horse needs clothes" story tonight (this morning?), it turns out that I've actually added 165 words to it. I changed the last sentence to something with more punch, added more details and description, and made it overall scarier (I hope) than it was before.
So. I'm happier with it. Not completely sure I'm happy happy with it yet, but it's getting better, anyhow.
accomplished 