I suck mightily at writing emotions in first drafts. What I did last night was...okay. But I need to make it pop. I want my reader to have a panic attack right along with my character, to know how that level of terror feels. And, of course, since I've only had one panic attack ever and that was over ten years ago, I'm kind of shooting in the dark here. But I think I might have a handle on it; I just have to figure out where I have the opportunity to stick in the little things that bring a scene like that to life.
And...oh, yeah. They should have some sort of monitoring equipment on him. I need to go back and edit that in.